How Fuel Production Levels Changed in Britain from 1981-2000

Overview

This line chart illustrates the fluctuations in fuel production levels in Britain between 1981 and 2000. The data tracks the production of natural gas, coal, and petroleum over this twenty-year period. Overall, there were noticeable shifts in the production levels of each fuel type, with natural gas experiencing significant growth, coal declining, and petroleum fluctuating considerably. The chart highlights key changes and intersections in production volumes among these fuels.

Key Features

• Natural Gas: Started at 39 million tonnes of oil in 1981 and rose to 101 million tonnes by 2000, showing substantial growth.
• Coal: Began at 80 million tonnes in 1981, experienced a slight decline by 1985, stabilized around 60 million tonnes in 1989, and then fell sharply to 23 million tonnes by 2000.
• Petroleum: Started at 90 million tonnes in 1981, peaked at 140 million tonnes in 1984, remained stable for three years, dropped significantly by 1990, and then peaked again at 140 million tonnes in 2000.
• The data reveals crossovers between coal and natural gas production levels.

Our Review

This essay provides a basic overview of the fuel production trends in Britain, but it needs significant improvement. The language is often vague and lacks the precision required for a higher band score. Phrases like "a good rate of growth" and "a great fell" are not specific enough. The essay also struggles with grammatical accuracy and coherence, making it difficult to follow the analysis. To improve, the writer should focus on using more precise language, providing specific data points, and structuring the essay with clearer transitions and topic sentences. We recommend focusing on improving vocabulary and grammar to enhance clarity and accuracy.

Student Submission

The line chart illustrates how many levels of fuel was producted between 1981 to 2000 in Briten. Overall,Among those fuels some fluctuation can be seen.There are several cross happend between coal and natural gas.Natural gas was taken the higest position here,Petroliam production was quite changed among those years. In 1981 the production of natural gas was started from 39 millions tonnes of oil and ended to 101 millions tonnes of oil in 2000 which means it takes a good rate of growth.Coal was started production from 80 millions tonnes of oil and a merginally fell can be seen in the year of 1985 after that it takes a rose and remain stable in 1989 which was 60 millions tonnes of oil after that it fell at 23 millions tonnes of oil in 2000. In terms of Petroleum it start from 90 millions tonnes of oil and takes a growth to 140 millions tonnes of oil in 1984 and remain satble for 3 years after that a great fell can be seen at 1990,furtermore it takes peak ration in 2000 of 140millions tonnes of oil.

IELTS Essay Assessment

1. IELTS Writing Score: 5/9 ■■■■■□□□□

2. Score Breakdown:

• Task Achievement: 5/9 - The essay addresses the task by describing the trends in fuel production. However, the description lacks precision and detail in places, and the overview is somewhat weak. The language used is often imprecise ("a good rate of growth," "a marginally fell," "a great fell"). More specific numerical data and a clearer comparison of trends would improve this aspect.

• Coherence and Cohesion: 4/9 - The essay attempts to organise information chronologically, but the paragraphs are not always well-structured. There is a lack of clear topic sentences and transitions between paragraphs and ideas. The use of "Overall" at the beginning is weak and doesn't really summarise the data. The writing jumps between fuels without smooth transitions.

• Lexical Resource: 5/9 - The vocabulary is adequate but limited. There is some repetition (e.g., "millions of tonnes of oil"). The range of vocabulary is not wide enough for a higher band score. Some word choices are inaccurate (e.g., "cross happened").

• Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 5/9 - The grammar contains several errors, including subject-verb agreement issues, tense inconsistencies, and incorrect preposition usage. Sentence structures are often simple and lack complexity. There are also some spelling errors.

  3. Error Analysis:

• Vocabulary Errors:

  • [producted] -> [ produced ] : Incorrect past participle form.
  • [Among those fuels some fluctuation can be seen] -> [ The production of these fuels shows some fluctuation. ] : More concise and natural phrasing.
  • [cross happend] -> [ crossings occurred ] or [ intersections occurred]: More accurate and grammatically correct.
  • [taken the higest position] -> [ reached the highest level ] : More formal and accurate.
  • [a merginally fell] -> [ a slight decrease ] : More precise and grammatically correct.
  • [takes a rose] -> [ rose ] or [ increased] : Simpler and more accurate.
  • [remain stable] -> [ remained stable ] : Incorrect verb tense.
  • [furtermore] -> [ Furthermore ] : Spelling error.
  • [peak ration] -> [ peak level ] : Incorrect word choice.

• Grammar Errors:

  • [how many levels of fuel was producted] -> [ the amount of fuel produced ] : Incorrect subject-verb agreement and word choice.
  • [In 1981 the production of natural gas was started from...] -> [ In 1981, natural gas production began at... ] : More concise and natural phrasing.
  • Multiple instances of inconsistent tense usage (e.g., mixing past simple and present simple). The entire essay should be consistently in the past tense.
  • Several instances of incorrect article usage (a/an/the).
  • Incorrect use of prepositions (e.g., "in 1989 which was").

  4. English Model Essay:

The line chart illustrates the production levels of natural gas, coal, and petroleum in Britain between 1981 and 2000. Overall, natural gas production experienced significant growth, while coal production declined substantially, and petroleum production fluctuated but remained relatively high throughout the period.

Natural gas production began at 39 million tonnes of oil equivalent in 1981 and increased steadily to 101 million tonnes by 2000. In contrast, coal production started at 80 million tonnes, fell slightly in 1985, then rose and stabilised around 60 million tonnes until a sharp decline to 23 million tonnes in 2000.

Petroleum production commenced at 90 million tonnes, rising to a peak of 140 million tonnes in 1984. After remaining stable for three years, production decreased significantly before recovering to 140 million tonnes in 2000. This indicates a cyclical pattern in petroleum production distinct from the consistent growth of natural gas and the decline of coal.